Umm.. MCT that was wack... the structure was awful.. you should put it into seperate lines.. punches were both played and poor...
Kyto.. the structure was better, but still off..
Try to keep all your lines the same length.. syllable wise also to get a good flow.
Personal attempts which was good.. but overall you need to add creativity and metas into your verse.. some nice touhes tho...
Both should check out the tips in WEC...

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