ite this battle was very newbish................wak 2 be honest,
lyrikal-you had punches sumwhere(very weak)...but your strcuture was wak..
...you need to make your lines longer..with complexed werds..etc..
also hit harder with punches they were quite played,
musik-wak man you also had sum sort of a punch but strcutre let you down,
read sum battles in elavated and werk on your structure,

vote-lyrikal for a decent attemp as a newb........

make sure you hit this http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109550 thx..........pz