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Im about to fuck u up
Imma rip out ur gut like its as menial as a paper cut
Change ur name Lyrical MC
U should be named after a peady like Micheal Jackson when he had a weave
I'll Play wiv words too descrbe u
Im phat but ur a fat bastard u should think before u chew
Now dont cry son
Just because ur boyfriend doesn't suck as well as ur Dyson its cuz he's Bi son
Im cold like im from the south pole
U broke kid cuz u bin suckin cock since u were six years old
I destroy people like syphilis
I swirl u about an spit u out Im like an expensive wine u cant get a sniff-o-this

il flip da script on dis shit,
dis battle is un~equall, like eminem vs limp bizket//
www.rapbattles.com defending illness,
same they couln't defend musick's pillness//
ur whole stlye is about to currupt and u won't lyrical justices,
dawg u signed u to dis battle, so fuck dis//
dis battle is very one side,
coz of fuckin rhymes neva colided//
ur mistaken,like micheal jakson wen he ad a face like instead of a boob job,
u can't rap,rookie!coz my lines are jst to gud to rob!//
ur vocabulary is speechless as grath gates,
with punches dat grayham nortan probalbly takes//
ur rhymes will leave u wid only da loser cup,
using viagra is your only way up//
leave u wid battle scarz, and 3 degree burns,man,
me join u? i'd sooner join da Klicks closs klan//
I spit lyrical,like every word iz clinical,
but ur beats are pitifull, with flow dat is un~literal//
but like Dick your chances are very small,
my rhymes will leave u week,you'll b seeing a lot of da medicain ball!!

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a close battle, but im gunna go for Lyrikal mc purly cos his flows betta. keeo workin at it though.

Vote = lyrikal mc
return da favahttp://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111215

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Kick Ur Arse To You U Say "stop,As My Gun Goes "POP"-lil jon

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ite this battle was very newbish................wak 2 be honest,
lyrikal-you had punches sumwhere(very weak)...but your strcuture was wak..
...you need to make your lines longer..with complexed werds..etc..
also hit harder with punches they were quite played,
musik-wak man you also had sum sort of a punch but strcutre let you down,
read sum battles in elavated and werk on your structure,

vote-lyrikal for a decent attemp as a newb........

make sure you hit this http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109550 thx..........pz

cheers bro^ 2-0 uppin///////////////////////////////////////

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Lyrical MC definetly took this wack battle with a verse just above wack, and as said before it was a good attempt at being a newb, i know this guys just started, the flow from both halfs was off most of the time but occasionally was there, no punchlines at all, but lyrical MC had some nice single handed diss's, Props

V/Lyrical MC

they were both pretty elementary, not very good for either but lyrical was the better of the two bad verses

uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^4-0
keep votin!!!!!!!!!

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flow - lyrical mc had the better structure/flow but still could use some work on it...
punchez - lyrical took that one cuz of the very weak punchez musick dropped
personalz - none ?
metaphors - lyrical had better metaphors although some were played
vote - lyrical mc

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cheers bro.............^^^^^^^
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