humph...
o....k....
it was simple and seemed like it didn't make much time to make it, this makes ME want to think it was a freestyle, but tha fact you told it tha way you did leaves massive doubts...
on tha other hand, you did use intense imagery to tell a poetical sense of your story about slavery, not a topic too touched upon in today's hip hop society...
overall, just try to take your time when you want to make a serious drop, read it over, change things to make it put emotion to your reader's...

5 / 10

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