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Old 02-09-04, 05:23 AM   #22
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its been a played topic....but u wrote it diff and thats
always a good thing.....the word choice/vocab could
have been better but overall this was a good peice...
flow was on key for the majority of the verse
but flow can always be improved, the structure
always be improved, check out diverses peice
"photographs...." and u see some sick struture there
the chorus was ehh/// could have been better
lyricaly wise but it was also an impact on the overall
story.
... drop smore.
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