imagery was the most stand out thing in Chapter One...your emphasis on detail helped me to relate to the feelings of the story...I'm curious to see exactly what happens in the next chapter...looks like there is a lot of torn emotion inside this persons head for something he did to his brother...hopefully all will be explained...this is great piece, keep up the super work, can't wait to see the next chapter...pz.

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