JMH
dumb guy thought he could stand up to this challenge
saw my rhyme stepped back and lost his balance
-filler,metiphore = 3
wouldnt out shine J with spits if ye wore lip-stick
is he holding hotness?nah the kid grips shit
metiphore,-wrong = 2
suprising nobody bites your lines coz all em "fillers"
you wanna see pussy take a glance at the mirror
personal,punch = 6
lyrics like un-needed maths teachers coz they sir- plus to requirements
this aint no formula one break but i'll have him re-tyreing
metiphore,-strectched,-played = 3
its like bullied midgets coz he not "up" for this fight
miss with my left then your face getting stuck with my right
metiphore,-played,punch = 3
your good lyrics unheard perhaps coz each verse is filled with dumb words
its like i beat you at losing my virginity the way i cum first
multi,metiphore,-played
You could not come more played than this. half your verse, maybe a lil less, like 3 lines had majorly played concepts like the re-tire,cum first,and midgets line. You really need to step away from the radio and do this on your own. Be more creative.
Overall = 17
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Quelude
You've got a braveheart like Gibson..but an actor just the same.
But Dope is a role you can't pull off..Your casted as lame
metiphore,wordplay,punch = 8
Let me show you the ropes...start with the one around ya throat there
Stand on a chair to get on my level..I'll kick it and hang ya ass in mid-air
metiphore,punch = 5
While you stuck on the level I attained... and elevated from
I'll make you my son..celebrate your birth and death..one verse Son.
-self hype,wordplay,metiphore = 6
I got no personals at all for you..you're still just a newb
Who talks shit and swallows spit..mouth still attached to the boob
multi,personal,metiphore = 6
Your death will be another notch... for my winning streak
Like I slid across the gym floor without moving my feet
-self hype,wordplay = 5
Dumb kid...from the burbs..trying to make himself Hood Rich
Who couldn't "wet" my appetite for a battle even if he could spit
personal,punch,metiphore = 6
Alot better than JMH. Very nice opener, kina dissapointed me tho, cus after that no lines were as good as that one. Besides that line I'd say a very average verse. But then again, you probly seen what was dropped before you. Ok drop. I think you can do alot better if you keep the heat up consistantly.
Overal = 36
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