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_-Lucky Rabbits Foot-_
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IP:
good work on this one... imagery was dope...
ill woridng on this internals were there...
approached the topic nicely the way it flipped
half way threw... this was actually pretty dope...
only thing wusnt as good as it can be...
you didnt use much vocab myabe not needed..
but I like seeing vocab... it display the imagery much better
it gives a better feeling to what your talking about...
and most were 1 syllable rhymes... which I usually
only expect to see in story telling and not a topical...
or wus this supposed to be story told?
anyway good work overall...
get at me peep my 2part story...
....Dead..To..Live....
....Dead..To..Live....(II)
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