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Old 02-14-04, 06:48 PM   #10
SMZ
Flyweight
 
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From: Charleston, SC
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"I don't really know how to improve my structure"

Your lines don't have to be necessarily even to flow nicely - peep something by Word~Perfect for an example. So if that's your style go with it. But if you want to have even structure then just try to even your bars out by saying things in different ways. ie:
"no chemistry we never even spoke
Your beauty makes me nervous so my words can't leave my throat"
becomes
there's no chemistry found here - we've never even spoke
So nervous from your beauty my words stick in my throat
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