hmm....topic was alright. You were fighting people over and over and you keep finding out its daydreaming. To me this was a symbol of having no life, that everything is not waht u think it is, but i think too much

. Overall it wasn't that great, i mean u got alot to improve on. First of all you should try to use a higher vocabulary in ure words, and really express your feelings. I didnt see much emotion in this piece, but good job.