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Old 02-29-04, 11:38 AM   #2
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this was kinna all over the place. like 3 poems merging into one.
& this..............."thats just destiny talking, fate has shifted
minds twisted where previously lifted
her smile, granted, without saying gifted"

read like u were rhyming just for the sake of rhyming. im all for the self pity poems as most of mine r, but stay on track. nice effort.
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