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Old 02-18-04, 04:21 PM   #1
Tiptripp
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From: Little place you've never heard of
good times gone i guess

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The world doesnt enjoy my comapany anymore
I see them laughing these people i used to adore no more,
now its menacing like the raven and the memory of elenor
Friends, foes, their eyes tell the story even her eyes glazed over
another chapter finished as my soul diminished
Im not satisfied, thing is i believed you everytime you lied
Im tired of that, my mind walks away just as she did
my mind mocking me from my chamber door
"Its her", I scream, "got to be her!" I beg some more
lightning flashes thunder crashes and i see her soul no more

So its 20 days and counting
why keep track as my pains amounting
Cant live like this, cant live without her
Why does she still play with me
Were not we, what i thought we were?

Sadness, soul blinks, all matter is messed up
as my heart starts to sink
my history has made you think
...alone...
thats just destiny talking, fate has shifted
minds twisted where previously lifted
her smile, granted, without saying gifted
....alone....

But that doesnt matter now
this world doesnt enjoy my company anymore
they hear my voice echo... but still my pains they allow
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Old 02-29-04, 11:38 AM   #2
Ma
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this was kinna all over the place. like 3 poems merging into one.
& this..............."thats just destiny talking, fate has shifted
minds twisted where previously lifted
her smile, granted, without saying gifted"

read like u were rhyming just for the sake of rhyming. im all for the self pity poems as most of mine r, but stay on track. nice effort.
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