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atlas the vagabond
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IP:
thanks for comin out today gentlemen, good fight, good fight. but here's the judgment.
popa doc-i've seen this flow of yours, and i have to say it is one of the most confusing i've ever encountered. i saw potential in it though, very descriptive in the way you were killing him. But you weren't killing him because the flow was way too confusing, and off. it sounds like a freestyle in the most literal sense ever, like i'm reading someone freestyling, but amateurish freestyle though. I felt some of the stabs at multi's though. I suggest you put the bars (these-->//) at the end of the rhyming line, so it's more understandable.
example
I've created so many lines, i'd say that i made rap//
But your wheel of fortune's still spinning, while i'm pat sajack//
you see, you know where the rhyme is exactly. Decent verse altogether though.
20 grand-I like how you started out, because you spoke fact in the first line. Or at least what was obvious to most. And nothing stings more in a battle than pure fact. You took it from a readers perspective and noticed his lack of structure, and made it an ill obsevational line, which was personal in itself. Steady flow and more than adequate punches kept me reading this one. Nice, nice.
so my votes go to 20 grand.
vote on the battle in my sig, and vote honestly.
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