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10-11-04, 04:10 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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inevitable(streets story unfinished)
IP: E7CA 0AA7
wrote this to this song, with T west and a bunch of cats, called the Killing process. Inspiration for this verse, the killing process
I apologize am ever I be sighted lying by the chrome// But truth in eyes, when they say i relied on i and i alone// lord bless the heart of men, that speak as if my life is thiers// let your eyes reside on those of mine like i alive was there// i was only a 9 to 5'in child survivin in a world// against I as I would try in time providing for my girl// still they hate me, even when they caught me in my weakness// broke my face in, yet in the face of loss, my traits remain elitest// their sentence is death now, I can see no other way// ski mask and leather gloves, with my nina tucked away// Sold my last two hundred pills, for double price and stocked my gun// with bullets enough, for an army's fall, to all be chopped at once// Blessed is her that bears my child, with knowledge of my fate// May she find a part of me, that breathes, that's in our infant's face// Vengeance killed me, my anger had me cookin in my hell// my children see my smile only when thier lookin at themselves// this is unfinished, but it is connected to my first open mic. in terms of story and all. read them both. Last edited by Maku JaiiLiin : 10-11-04 at 05:26 PM. |
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10-11-04, 05:10 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: DDF2 7C41
wow, dope drop, read all together it flows well, and i liked your vocabulary and content, love this closer to this piece as well, great style and words.....awesome job...hit me up on a topic, i still want to collab.....1
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10-23-04, 03:15 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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IP: 8600 1E3D
uppin 4 votes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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10-23-04, 09:59 PM
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The Ups and Downs of Life
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IP: D666 F54C
this shit was pretty dope-- good start, nice flow, nice imagery-- i enjoyed it.
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10-23-04, 10:02 PM
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Middle Weight
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IP: 8B20 A98E
Flow was tight, structure was tight, vocab, imagery, all that was good. But what really stood out was the substance. Even without that, still levels above most. Keep it up.
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10-23-04, 10:47 PM
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IP: 8B20 A98E
gayest fucken shit i ever read
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10-30-04, 02:28 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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IP: E7CA 0AA7
................uppin 4 feedback on this one......
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11-01-04, 04:12 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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IP: 8600 1E3D
upppin 4 feedback on this one ............. ..............
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12-06-04, 04:11 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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IP: 8600 1E3D
uppin 4 feedback
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