theres some yellow there brush off ya shoulder
straight rackitin his ass as he gets served over
- wasn't really feel'n this second line helped a bit

cat be askin me, are u be stabbin me?
only reason u (so ill), be coughin up blood after battlin me
-Again this is an okay punch not overly creative

im the lakers as i be embarrisinly finishing this story
cats be askin if im kobe and was that robert ori(losin to old team,jus a lil bit ago)
-This one I didn't like at all it was wordy without a punch

damn, ya name for this thread, cut and paste for the first time
fuckin fag,effectin the st8est like quier eye for the str8 guy
-First line didn't make sense to me, second was a weak punch

positively dead, fags hiv'd, case closed likier than a *fin on a fish*
nice possition i put this bitch in, in that avatar, jus another pictureperfect *finish*
-this was a nice finish try and make them all like this next time


ayo, Ori aint picture perfect, Ima Perfect Picture/
Like nomo signed for millions, Ima Perfect Pitcher/
-The first line was good the second was alright

I throw them shut outs n U just beanin batterz/
Ori's wheaties for breakfast, you cream corn and crackerz/
-This is a average punch origional but not to developed

Girlz talkin 0n how u Packin vienna sausages/
same bitch is stalkin me cuz one fuck fix they postures/
-This was alright second line was weak

its a good year cuz i stay huggin these streetz/
perfects peddlin powerwheels still sittin in a car seat/
Nice punch, creative too

I catch no sleep, like half O's Of Yo/
These lines just keep comin, like nine lines ago/
First line was nice, second was kinda lacked a punch

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