Aight BlackSmith nice verse you stayed on point but try to shorten you lines up a bit it will help the reader.....and Fine Mind that was an aaight verse it reminds me of an early me in an weard erie sort of way....your doin what i call Lryicle Murder but next time get your rhymein words togeather and try to invent new ways to kill a person like for instance:wit a hot wheels car or sumthin na mean? but untill you get your rhymes together i cant vote for you....and dont give up just cause you lose keep tryin man youll get better.
V/BlackSmith
aaight i droped an honest one for you now its your turn..
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