During my first battle they sayed i was bad news//
If i use verse againist u it would make it to quick for you to Lose//
egh, not great coulda used some wordplay or something to spice it up
Im from the heart of New York,(The Ghetto)IM qucik to kill Goonz//
im use this,and break u in half like a Plastic Spoons//
break you in half like plastic spoons is kinda played out, you coulda multi-d this easy too with little effort
My record is like the lakers winning series 4 - 2//
You gonna get knocked out just like i Ko Omega Blu//
This punchline is a good start but its not really a great attack its more you boasting so its not that great- there is a similie in here though
I get people to see my verse,and gett my rhymes televised//
You mom tongue and ur votes relate because they are always Memorized//
This is kinda vague, a problem I have sometimes also, you gotta make your punches clever but easily understandable at the same time... This verse has gotten progressivley better though.
You the badddest mc and ya in the weakest crew on this Website//
If it was not for the ass vote u would have been ko by N-Sight//
Decent personal... I think you show good potential you just have some things to work out here on your quest to murder kids.

I hate to do this Lemme instil a lil truth in ya
KillaCamFlow?Ha!There aint one ounce of proof in ya
This was kinda snappy, not a bad bar it had good flow Im just not sure i woulda used it as an opener.
He tha carpenter of tha game....he loves to make tha bench
You too overrated...my sloppiest lines will make ya flinch
Good wordplay, nice flow, ya structure is good so far...
From "slappin-this-bitch" to "frontin his lines"
U better off stayin mute and throwin up signs
nice punch great wordplay, the structure shortened up a bit but its a nice line
Son listen my lines will bust you all up in ya guts
Tha rappin version of Mr.Planters the way he on my nuts
Egh, not really feelin this, but o.k
Like a virgin in good pussy he afraid to bust
One worsd of advice:dont even post...save the fuss
Nice, I liked this line, all in all I think your verse flowed really well, and it had a good amount of wordplay and punchlines in it.... You will get my vote in this battle and I'll look forward to seein more nice spits from you. Vote- Black-Thief
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