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Old 06-04-04, 08:08 PM   #9
Shadows edge
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Hmm... pretty good battle, I think King was a nice line away from winning this battle, but -Trouble- took it in my mind. The "king in check" thing is a played concept but flipped well I think, homosexual tendancies was nice.

"
You could continuously line-bite; it still won’t help u to win this fight
Cuz when ure fat ass puts on clothes, that’s the only time that u ever tight
This bitch not respecting no one going around acting all troublesome
Then I see him votin for me, got split personalities, I guess u double dumb
U cudn’t hit the bullseye if you were standing an inch from the dart board
Always battling in the league so when u lose it don’t fuck up ure record"

^ see... you started off nice, but this is all kinda weak. the concepts aren't great or are played, the lines are a tad stretched and you didn't really word shit too well. also, league battles count towards record, but either way the closer ain't fantastic.

v/ -T-
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