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atlas the vagabond
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IP:
props to both battlers on this one, decent entertainment. but here's the verdict.
the metaphor-decent structure i liked it. Overall subject matter kept to the diss, problem though. THE HORRIBLE SPELLING! lol. With text you gotta spell decently, because you got me saying, "Damn." and it's not because of the lines, i haven't seen bad spelling like this in....wait a minute ever! All jokes aside though, i liked this line a lot.
if you win the battle it'll be like a...retarded leperchon just dumb luck/
that was nice. you made great use of 'metaphors' which is key.
bk-decent verse, i liked this line
that ripleys shit is one of tha most played out lines
you should save your flow and send it to "pimp my ryhmez"
because all in all, that ripley's line is one of the most played out lines.
your is a natural disaster like some real bad weather
but whwat was wrong with this verse, is that you had lackluster punch lines. You set the punchline up. "leave (fill in something) like-" you'd have us waiting at that point, and when the ''like'' came up, you handed us a weak metaphor.
you lacked execution and creativity.
but you came back with a decent closer that was the nicest punchline.
just not nice enough to win you this one.
vote=metaphor.
please return the favor by dropping an honest vote on my battles(in the sig)
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