I tried my hand at a love song, and also tried to tell a story bout me and this shorty I used to be with and all...

Verse 1
I got a love, I also got a problem within' and/
All I can do is keep my feelings bottled and hidden/
It began when we was kids, then now it's much diff'rent/
I know you'll hear this, but I hope that you listen/
Once I wanted to tell my feelings, but before expression/
I asked a question, if we could be more than friends, and/
You replied yes then, I got to caressin'/
Your soft skin, while you was up in my ear confessin'/
The way I make you feel and the smile on your face/
That I place, hearts beatin' faster than a horse race/
In that embrace, can't replace your vivrant touch/
First time I called you beautiful your eyes lit up/
It was in your car, by the park when it was just gettin' dark/
Other folks was in they house, then our tounges was in our mouths/
I enjoyed your company far beyond the kissin'/
But when I wanted to say those 3 words difficulty had risen/
You said you don't want no relationship at all/
Unfortunately, that means no relationship with Paul/
As I recall, you was in Jamacia when I falled/
For you, to others love is what it may be called/

Still workin' on a chorus and another verse, but I'm uppin' for feedback.

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