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Old 08-04-04, 04:59 AM   #15
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your way honest in this dawg

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Originally Posted by raw killa
i submit subliminal messages through my cockyness,every time rounds shatter ur cartolidge's,lyrical punches collapse ur esophguase,gettin slapped wit 8 arms wit each 16 bars like i was half octopus,u niggaz dicks n nuts so small 2 see'em u need binoculars,my dick been i mo bitches mouths than canker sores
^^^this was aight i get your point"nice opener"

people say i self glorify myself actin like im better than dem,but i dont need 2 self glorify ya'll do it for me wit ya ignorance n arogance & then,niggaz get mad cuz my nigga rapes da paper when he fucks a pen,"oh he's white he cant say nigga he doesnt fit in",clouded by sin,countin my losses as blinded wins,cuz promise if i was 100% black u niggaz would b feelin me then
^^^this was straight dope

representin breathless aressting mindscapes,haunted by hates,surrounded by fakes,lets b honest half u fuckas,nuttin but straight suckas who couldnt sell a album if weed came inside wit they tapes,n they lyrics scream when attacked
n begin hollarin rape,cop ya cd's jus 2 use as paper weights
^^kinda played with the paper wieght line

im not sayin im da greatest,or fuckin rap godest,im jus bein honest,my bad 4 bein a lil 2 modest,lotta rappers here act like they da hottest,but in my lyrics u see da startin flames like i set fires wit my rhymes cuz im a lyrical arcinist,rap has changed its different now n every 1 wanna b artist
^^^this was tight,my favourite lines

i could give a shit if u respect my flow,u can love me our hate me but i gotta make dis doe,talkin like ya'll kno,but ya'll faggots will neva kno who da fuck i amso jus respect it hoes,b4 i make nets outta ya clothes,wit burn marks n blood stains clingin 2 da holes,niggaz like damn wut u gotta do dat 4
^^^^nice flow

2 many screws in my head loose,dats why im crazy wit rhymes when up in da booth,speakin crazy but tellin da truth,,im sick of explain i got nuttin 2 prove,
jus like if i shoot myself 2marrow so i aint got nuttin 2 lose,so is life or death
decisions 2 difficult 2 choose,n i swallow,da sarrow wit a bottle of booze,
hop in my car wit da empty bottle n go 4 a cruise,crash n kill 2 innocent people now im left wit tickets n lawsuits n a horrible bruise,so which do u think dat i choose?

^^koo closer

overall killa this was a good piece dawg i liked reading this..nice work..7.5/10
ya had some serious agenda n shit ta get off ya shoulders it seemed n i liked the way ya did it...don't sweat the haters dawg....

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