the content was good, but most of your lines don't make any sense and the structure is off. it's a shame cos i really like the idea... but don't just throw random words into your sentences to get as many multis as possible, think about what you are writing. try mix it up with more wordplay and just go back over and improve. 6/10. peace!

ps. check my open mic if you get time

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