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Old 08-11-04, 05:28 PM   #17
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Voted For: dysphoria

ya, tupac alypse yo strutcher really hurtin ya, cant even catch the shit u sayin wit that. fix that right. and havin to explain every thing wit (these) is played out. if u cant say a line where they aint ganna get it with out (these), it aint a good line

dysphoria ya shits fucked up too but u had batter metaphors and shit that made mores sense, maybe jus cuz ya structure wasn't quite AS BAD, your shit was stretch though, work on that. and yo dont put-this-shit in every line u that-you-rhyme. thats some nonesense, read some better battles to get a hang of this shit, both of you.

but yo return wit a vote.
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