There was glimpses of this that I liked, what really caught my eye was the rhythm, had good internal rhymes, nice multies and everything was on point... Some wordplay shone aswell, there were areas that were funny, and had a good sense of knowledge... Thought the vocab needed improving slightly, I dont mind simplistic, but this was like nursery rhyme, both of ya combined well... The other aspect ya may need to imporve on is it jus got tedious to read, felt like it werent going no where with this, had no substance to it... Otherwise a very solid drop, showed ya skill and potential, keep dropping and elevate...

Peez...