Yo this is me and ma man K-oss and we did this in like 10 mins, so tell us how u think about it.

Yo in the street we gotta hold the heat

like pubuerty kidz ya alwayz gettin yo meat beat

catz stay gettin' decieced for the mind they speak

tha weak can keep WACC for us we spit for tha meek(ill)

little kids get decieved into the path of the weak

garbage eattin emcees but still find room to speak

Stay dirty wit no broom to sweep

instead we sweep hard hittin lyricz of yo feet

Plus stash the hash in the jeep, and cash we recieve

money and high price clothes is only to deceive

tay high with the weed while ya smoke the weak leave

just cheatin yo' self when ya spit, like Ace'z up yo sleeve

Repeat one's rhyme and your neck gets cleaved

shots received to tha core, spit tha type to make ya eardrums sore

The heat is so much it's like we keep the sun in the 4's

so ILL like we sweat viruses out our pores

Stay strapped while we let the gums come out your jaw

flabbin and stabbin ya, fakez get dey mouth turned raw

Then spill courvasiour on you, so you can burn more

bleed more, gutz n stuff everywhere like horror gore

Then put you in a black bag like grocery food

trying to act gangsta but ya call out peeps like 'RADICAL DUDE'

We were send to earth to roast you fools

scab ova from lying in ya own blood pools

yo shit was hott cypha put togetha real quicc. ayo dont sleep on this cuzzinz up this shit.


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1luv

Hell no yall ain't sleepin' on this shit^^^^^

Do yall ever wake up....damn

i was feeling this in certain places, but i seen better from you f, and the other dude i never even heard your shit, but it was aiight, vocab was good enough

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There was glimpses of this that I liked, what really caught my eye was the rhythm, had good internal rhymes, nice multies and everything was on point... Some wordplay shone aswell, there were areas that were funny, and had a good sense of knowledge... Thought the vocab needed improving slightly, I dont mind simplistic, but this was like nursery rhyme, both of ya combined well... The other aspect ya may need to imporve on is it jus got tedious to read, felt like it werent going no where with this, had no substance to it... Otherwise a very solid drop, showed ya skill and potential, keep dropping and elevate...

Peez...

^^^No doubt...good look...1

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