yea, the second one is much better than the first one but it could be better.

Like the first one, had nice rhyme scheme and flow, but seriously, no lines that make the listener laugh or go OHHH SHIT!!. It's jus, blah. But flow and rhymin' would be good there, but the content is aiight, not the worst, not the greatest.
2nd one was better. You had some nice tries at meta's and did good wit some. But you should try addin' wordplay into yo verses to make them sick. That will make the listener be like DAMN!!! And NO, it does NOT have to be a diss to someone to make the listener go OH. It jus needs to be somethin' thats very creative and shit. Or put some killer strings of multi's in there. But try for wordplay, and your shit will be hotter. and that's word. pc

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