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Old 10-02-04, 02:31 PM   #60
~Lady Fiya~
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Voted For: e-dubz

best opener: e-dubz
ima rape this bitch........ and he wont hesitate to recieve it
cuz when im done grand on his knees like hes prayin for jesus
^lol lmao, nice
best closer: e-dubz
picked apart yo lines, still cant find a punch.. u not perfection
ur flow grimey but inconsistant like tryin to piss wit erections
^u coulda stated it betta but u did a good job overall.....
your vocab was above average, u had sum nice punches delivered smoothly.... the best line in ur verse was the part with "church shoes on ShaQ" lmfao , rofl....... ha ha
your verse was 7.9/10 some faults but completed te tasks of deliverin' punches and metas....... nice lol

20 Grand
Class is now in session... so shut the fuck up!
Hey kids.. ya im talking to u...
^that introduction was un-necessary takes away from ur flow....
Battle'N 20 GraND so you can abosrb some of the wealth//
Might as well stick ur dick in ur ass,cuz ur so "full of yourself"//
^your best lines, you had sum nice punches pretty accurate, and you had wordplay which is nice..
however, our closer wasn't good at all, i believe i heard that sumwhere before or saw it in someone's verse, but i ain't tryna start trouble... you didn't co,me very hard at all, you have to work on the way you word your lines also...... 6.9/10
not bad, but u can do better......

Return the favor.......... pz
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