I think this was nice, had some powerful lines but jus werent going no where, it looked like you were pushing a story through but it werent working... The rhyme scheme was iLL, the multies and rhythm was hella nice, flawless in mos places... Wordplay again was nice, similes were working all the way through, combining with the vocab produced some imagery... The vocab was there, strong in places and you gave a good knowledge, next time try spitting something with some substance, keep spitting and elevating...

Peez...