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..."Heaven Meets Hell".... ....*looks into the sky*..... Expressin My Stress As I'm Testin My Text Progressin Thru Heaven Testin Whose Next Divine Light Pushin Past Some Devious Pricks Burn To The Center Of My Soul W/ 1000 Licks Split Flaming Spit N Cool Down Demonic Shit Squash Shit, W/ The Fist Of God On Every Hit Watch As It, Severs Every Word Launched @ It The Creature Bit, Soon After His Neck Was Slit Coughin Up Flames, As It Fell Back In The Pit Provin A Demon's Brain Is Nothing But Half-Wit Dead In My Right Calf, But I Got The Last Laugh As I Predicted Rhyme Schemes On A Bar Graph Climb Stars, To Exude Heaven On My Battle Scars And Touch All Angels W/ All Of My Battle Bars ....*looks down @ the ground*.... You Touch Heaven? I Teach Terror N Rip Grown Men Tell Me When, I Can Release Pain W/ A Plastic Pen Flow's Elastic, Put Fists In Bars N My Words R Drastic Mr. Sarcastic, Strech The Truth And Say Ur Fantastic Your Ill? Sure, Can Ride My Dick Jus To Feel Secure Kill All That's Pure, Use Black Magic N Induce Torture Teach Lessons In-Abuse N Rotate A-Cute Angles Obtuse Heaven's An Excuse, Step-in Stools N Fasten The Noose Lights Empty, Dark Envy, Heaven Can Hardly Avenge Me Kill The Evil In Me? Like Hell Will Freeze Over Eventually |
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IP: 87CE 4A4B
dun sleep...
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IP: EF7A A2F1
Yo son that was pretty tight, im was feelin it
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IP: 416B D93D
i think the rhyme was tight but wasnt following any particular pattern... like a story line.... truth is.. i dont know what was the point of writing this?
but the rhyme scheme was dope... so id say... 3/5 good job dun... keep writin. |
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IP: D069 6C00
I think this was nice, had some powerful lines but jus werent going no where, it looked like you were pushing a story through but it werent working... The rhyme scheme was iLL, the multies and rhythm was hella nice, flawless in mos places... Wordplay again was nice, similes were working all the way through, combining with the vocab produced some imagery... The vocab was there, strong in places and you gave a good knowledge, next time try spitting something with some substance, keep spitting and elevating...
Peez... |
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IP: 87CE 4A4B
its keystlyed...of course it doesnt have a point....
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IP: 05F4 6886
yo the shyt was plain phat son, that's all i gotta say. u straight killed it wit the multi's kid fa. this is some hot shit, but on the real i kinda got lost while i was readin it but some hot shyt tho keep postin
go reply to my shit slum flow-http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=17122 |
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that was bangin son. I think you know what you're doing after all.. lol... newbie with a new meaning... and flow. The multi's were killer. keep em comin
pz |
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IP: 87CE 4A4B
uh huh...thanks....
imma go drop my latest |
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