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atlas the vagabond
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IP:
Voted For: Dopeman
props to both battlists but here's the verdict
flow:dopeman
vocab:dopeman
punches:dopeman
structure:dice
Hunger:dopeman
verdict:dice, this verse seemed either like a rush job, or your hunger for a win was on zero. Which even though you won last time, i don't respect, every battle should have you hungry, and this verse lacked true effort.
feeding and feasting does not rhyme sir.
mattress does not rhyme with my class
'tress does not rhyme with class.
You MUST at least rhyme, and you lost huge points for this. Huge points.
dopeman-i sensed a huge amount of hunger in this one, which i and many others respect a lot. I can tell you really went at it with him, which showed in the fact that you had a lot more punches.
this aint no beef, cause i know your addicted to my 'Lines' like naomi campbell!
that was a nice closer. But there is definate room for improvement, many of the punches lacked power, they were light jabs, but strong enough to score you the win in the end.
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