Voted For: CriTiC

wow! now this is a good topikal battle...
good verse from both sides here..... ut my vote has to go to critic..... you start of very nice.... good multies and structure and flow was brlliant....
but this part wins it for you
Suddenly
I began to turn in a circular motion
I’m getting a sickening notion
Being trapped in this ocean
With frightened emotions
Lost without devotion
^^^VERY NICE...... some good thought went into those few lines.. and still going strong with the multies.... and you finished it off well... overall.. 9.5/10

supervillian.... good...
just for a bit of feedback i think you need to work on you speeling.... mybe just proof read it once or twice before you drop....
well you definatly win on muties.. but your rhymes are pretty simple.... thats one thing to work on....
notice that when critic rhymes his words are big and he uses a wide range of vocab.... eg
hidden
ridden
prison
emission
sensation
location
situation
destination
creation
relaxation

and your words are alot more simple
mo
show
flo
doe

alot of your rhymes are pretty forced.... i think you need to take some more time in thinking your verse out before you drop... anyway vote to critic.... for a brilliant topikal verse.......

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