^^^uppin' for feedback.

being this was my first topical......

1) im actually great with the spelling......obviously, the only reason this piece has errors in it is because i tried to consolidate my letter space so that i would be able to keep my structure on point.

2) battlecats...pick who you want to, but fuck voting just for big words (no disrespect). im mean, yea, big words add a sophisticated feel to a verse, however, i felt there was no need for them to be used all over in my verse. i honestly thought that my multies made up for my vocab or "lack there-of". my intention for this topical was to express a general point of view from a industry standpoint. it was about the message...not the words i used. if spelling and big words play into the voting process for topicals...then in the future, i'll keep that in mind.

3) if the verse seemed rushed, its because it was. the original verse was dialogue between a veteran rapper and a new aspiring artist about the trappings of the music business. i couldnt properly execute the concept because i was not able to use different colors (to differentiate speakers) for dialogue purposes. so, at the last minute, i just crammed the concept together as one piece and submitted it so i'd make my deadline. i know that by doing so, my verse had lost some of its edge and creativity, however, i am confident enough with my work to dismiss any perceived "excuses".

4) 4fil...arent you on my team??? lol.

what up crit??? this shits mad slept on homie. i'll do what i can to up it a few more times playboy. i havent been online much recently.

oner.


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