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I Actually Really Liked The Content And Such...
All Three Verses Had Great Emotion To Them...
Ideph Seemed To Stray From Topic A Bit...
But His Verse Was On Point Beside From That Fact...
My Favorite Verse Was Anx's...
These Lines Were The Best To Me Just Because Of The Patho's:
"Unlike in most things, where i just get turned away...
Like in school, cause it aint possible to earn the grade...
Walking the tightrope, and for that you need actual balance...
So from then on I just stuck with my natural talents..."
I Can Definatly Relate To What Was Being Said Then...
Very Nice, Im Sure Alot Of People Relate To These Verses...
Wich Makes Them Memorable Pieces...
The Only Thing I Didnt Like About This Was The Drop Settup...
That Shit Was Looooong As Fuck...
And Even Though It Was Good It Was Still A Struggle To Read...
Because You Had Three Verses, Prolly About 20 Lines Each One After Another...
So The Reader Doesnt Get Any Breaks Or Anything...
Next Time Try To Chop Everything Up Alittle More...
Tryn Keep Verses To 10 Lines And If They Go Over Enough Just Make Another Verse...
And Then Throw Some Hooks And Choruses In There...
You Can Keep That 20 Line Format If You Want With A Chorus...
Cuz It Gives The Reader Enough Of A Break To Were They Dont Lose Interest...
But Ya, I Really Did Like This Piece...
I Just Wasnt Feeling The Drop Format At All...
And Final's Turning Out To Be A Nice Little Topical Writer...
I Seen Anx Has Been Working With You...
You're Definately Coming Up...
You've Got A Nice Writing Style, Very Deep And Emotional...
Steady Flow To All Your Lines...
Stay Up And Keep Elevating, You'll Get There...
Big Ups To This Whole Squad, Keep Doin It...
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