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Old 01-15-05, 12:17 AM   #1
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Get Serious (ft. Indeph & final)...

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Indeph's verse.
Now get serious..quick the smerks and straitin your back
the generals here..get to work..I'll wait in the back
I'm sick of waiting for wack..one dumb line..and I'll break and attack..
that'll make homies care about what they say in a rap
hooks.... don't make an artist,and looks.....just a market
you atracting prematures,like books.....from a target
a chicagain where's there's always some crooks involved in
when they took deposites..from the bank when they looked in closets
Biografiti..come buy our grafit..all over walls..all over stalls
covered in bathrooms..tissue on the ceiling..tipied easy..
owners have to peel them..the cause and effect..the cause is neglect
for real,you saw the look on there faces..and all of the rest..
if you call them less..niggers or hoodlems..you haven't had to call the feds
So.....just walk away from it..like puff when yellin at dylon..
learn your lesson too..the ugly put a smile on..I mean a mask..
I mean I don't even laugh..when niggas lower standards..
and say I want a peice of that..now that proves..
black dudes to the brown and white..we all got it bad too..
shit seems like all our idiots sound alike...................

anxiety's verse.
Rap, the one thing that made me able to express myself...
Elevated to the point where people will accept my help...
Unlike in most things, where i just get turned away...
Like in school, cause it aint possible to earn the grade...
Walking the tightrope, and for that you need actual balance...
So from then on I just stuck with my natural talents...
Ever since, been holdin down my name with the skill...
That's got your back to me right when I'm aimin to kill...
Then claimin ya will, so no more future generations can breath...
With a nation to please... There aint no way you'd succeed...
While i can go half-ass and still blast-past the competition...
Just because you drop whack-tracks it doesnt mean we wanna listen...
Been checkin for talent, for someone good who's time will come...
Found em... But it isnt a lie if i said he was the final one...
Just a bunch of vets and some kids rappin rotten...
If you think your in the middle your really at the bottom...
And forgotten... Pathetic, a nothing, sad kid with no hope...
And for some reason, most of you still think that your dope...
Cause it's what you been told, but you been hearin a lie...
Has anyone ever read your shit and got a tear in their eye?
Or even been hooked enough to actually finish a verse?
Need enough confidence in your skill to get it to first...
But seriously get out of my way when im steamin about...
You wont want your back turned to me when im cleanin you out...

final's verse.
Influences everyone in a sense you cant explain
its knowledge you retain whether your free or enslaved
prepare yourself for the loss of the fans and fame
even if you own the whole pie or invest in just a grain
its a shame,big egos,theyre powerful is what they stated
but those that claim cocky brains will turn plain and degraded
its insane some of the same assholes think they runnin shit
then beg for cash when theyre business is washed up and slipped
shit,for some cash i bet theyll burn and grill your baby infant
thats the industry for ya...either kill or be killed in an instant
shits fucked up, they talkin nonsense bad examples being made
unresponsible rappers, willin to pull pistols out on stage
now the games fake, mainstream daggered hip hops heart
nothin but everyday slain emcees,shattered,dreams blew apart
why cant things be how it was when i was young at the start
when pun,pac,nas, and biggie was being blasted from cars
or apartments nowadays the game is completely changed...
the soul is vanished, full of spite its like everythings rearranged
little kids with big mouths, parents just dont give a fuck
and the children searching for hope seem to get blocked and stuck
now rap is invisioned as a way to corrupt minds and start beef
kids fightin with guns not knowin what it does kills his friend in the street
but no matter how much bigotry and anger is visible today
stay yourself,dont get it twisted,and your mind will stay tamed

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Old 01-15-05, 12:21 PM   #2
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Old 01-15-05, 02:00 PM   #3
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yo i really like dis joint right here yo u took ya time put it together right. nice flow multis metas everything was in this peice........... yo keep droppin homie aiight 1
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Old 01-15-05, 02:38 PM   #4
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Lol @ me being the only one in the OM with no friends
dope job final and Anx...

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Old 01-15-05, 10:29 PM   #5
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Indeph... dope verse... good wordplay and emotion.. pretty dope verse from you, im still getting use to your style though.. Anxiety.. still as dope as u used to be.. good wordplay in a couple lines.. good emotion also.. you just told the truth and how it was.. that made your verse doper... final.. good way to end it.. you've elvated alot since you first dropping OM's... you had good multies and a dope style... u got a way with words..

why cant things be how it was when i was young at the start
when pun,pac,nas, and biggie was being blasted from cars

that was a dope bar.. good flow and all of you stayed consistent... a long read but worth it

overall :9.5/10
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Old 01-16-05, 11:52 AM   #6
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Old 01-17-05, 01:37 PM   #7
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Uuuuupppppppiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnggggggggg.
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Old 01-17-05, 05:26 PM   #8
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Old 01-17-05, 09:04 PM   #9
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Old 01-18-05, 11:58 PM   #10
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Old 01-19-05, 01:49 AM   #11
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wow, very good verses from everyone, the first 2 lines we're kind of simple, but everything after was very creative.. 9.5.. Hmm, for somereason it feels like i could add something to this O.M.
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Old 01-19-05, 10:53 AM   #12
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Of course Dabados the great can always add something... Kid, listen, you aint that goddamn good, at all... You cant add shit to this... All three of us shit on your skill... First you in some thread claimin you %100 percent sure you can beat me in a topical, then you come in MY fucking OM telling me you could add something... Well you did, your 2 fucking sense, now get the fuck outta here.
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Old 01-19-05, 08:33 PM   #13
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lol..w/e man, set it up... 40 linex max.. due thursday.. topic: w/e.. pick anything..pc
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Old 01-20-05, 03:33 PM   #14
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I Actually Really Liked The Content And Such...
All Three Verses Had Great Emotion To Them...
Ideph Seemed To Stray From Topic A Bit...
But His Verse Was On Point Beside From That Fact...
My Favorite Verse Was Anx's...
These Lines Were The Best To Me Just Because Of The Patho's:

"Unlike in most things, where i just get turned away...
Like in school, cause it aint possible to earn the grade...
Walking the tightrope, and for that you need actual balance...
So from then on I just stuck with my natural talents..."


I Can Definatly Relate To What Was Being Said Then...
Very Nice, Im Sure Alot Of People Relate To These Verses...
Wich Makes Them Memorable Pieces...

The Only Thing I Didnt Like About This Was The Drop Settup...
That Shit Was Looooong As Fuck...
And Even Though It Was Good It Was Still A Struggle To Read...
Because You Had Three Verses, Prolly About 20 Lines Each One After Another...
So The Reader Doesnt Get Any Breaks Or Anything...
Next Time Try To Chop Everything Up Alittle More...
Tryn Keep Verses To 10 Lines And If They Go Over Enough Just Make Another Verse...
And Then Throw Some Hooks And Choruses In There...
You Can Keep That 20 Line Format If You Want With A Chorus...
Cuz It Gives The Reader Enough Of A Break To Were They Dont Lose Interest...

But Ya, I Really Did Like This Piece...
I Just Wasnt Feeling The Drop Format At All...
And Final's Turning Out To Be A Nice Little Topical Writer...
I Seen Anx Has Been Working With You...
You're Definately Coming Up...
You've Got A Nice Writing Style, Very Deep And Emotional...
Steady Flow To All Your Lines...
Stay Up And Keep Elevating, You'll Get There...
Big Ups To This Whole Squad, Keep Doin It...
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