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Old 01-24-05, 04:38 PM   #16
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This was a pretty decent peice. I liked the first verse and the hook alot.

The 2nd verse started amazing. The fish bowl visual is nice. But then it trailed off.
3rd Verse was solid, with a few gaps in flow.
Emotion was everywhere...


Good Peice.
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