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Old 01-28-05, 05:51 PM   #6
~Lady Fiya~
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From: chi-town
This was feedback posted for MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ

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peepin polls.......... but nice drop i like how u connect ya lines and complete your thought onto the next line.. best lines were:
The kid shaking energetically in his closet. Like full of rain, he was soaked in sweat
Hand over his mouth, holding his breath. Staying still, hoping the boogey man don’t detect
Motion. He’d smelled the little kid stench, as he moved closer to the door, the kid gets timid
The man opens the door, he puts his hands on the boy pants and started rupturing it

Parallel u have elevated from last i saw ur topical battles..
Go ahead and say you’ve been sick of hearing my Name
Cause no matter what ill show you real love or Shame
Discussing it isn’t even the matter in this matter of Time
Either way I got control over you, on any type of Line
^ur best lines.... nice battle overall stay up kiddies..
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