oh ite lol overall, the verse needed help. in my opinion, you should stretch the lines and make them longer by addin sum multis and shit. also instead of spittin simple shit like: "and end up dead in a trunk" you should add sumptin to spice it up to catch da readers eye and make it a hard ass punchline. just add more multis and the main shit that niggas would want to hear in a battle verse, then itll be alright. go to da tutorial and practice wit shit. keep ya head up..............lol is this good?????

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