Listening..

Your vocals are too high.
Quality is ass.

Flow falls off.. quite a bit..

Lyrics arent very good.. even for a freestyle..

You need to talk louder.. In the middle you just like, die out..
I cant understand what your saying towards the end..

Mic presence sucks..
You had decent breath control at the beginning.. at the end it wasnt very good..

Overall, not a very good track.. even for a freestyle.