Voted For: godfather

DEVISTATION

This "father" is the uncles mother of his own daughter,
I will show him the "god", and show him how I mob slotter.
(DECENT OPENER, SECOND LINE KINDA WEAK...6/10)

Now I will raise the water and lower your skills, under hills,
Keep it on the down low, thats where the belong, in landfils.
(GOOD FLOW, GOOD USE OF MULTIES...7/10)

We ahve the same records but thats about to change, today,
You have to consume my verse and die in the range I say.
(WEAK BAR TO ME...IT WASNT AS GOOD...HAD FLOW THO...6/10)

If you knew your own "mother", your dad would be overwelmed,
So hold on ya seat, as I take you in the next reality realm,
(FIRST LINE PLAYED OUT...DECENT BAR THO...NICE FLOW..7/10)

Show you how mch you are worth and pay to give you away,
I sold You worse than Icecream, on a dry, hot summer day.
(GOOD BAR...WORDPLAY GOOD...FLOW GOOD...7/10)

These last lines I have to fill will show your real true side,
You have been under my wicked spells, only my laws, you abide.
(WEAK CLOSER...KINDA SELF GLORIFACATION...6/10)

AIGHT...YOUR VERSE WAS GOOD, YOU COULD ELEVATE SOME MORE...JUST OPEN YOUR IMAGINATION DOGG...GET RAW WITH THIS SHIT...LIKE ABOUT HIS FAMILY AND SHIT, GET NASTY WIT IT...U FEEL...OTHER THAN THAT IT WAS AIGHT...GOOD STRUCTURE AND FLOW WAS AIGHT, BUT SOMETIMES CHOPPY HERE AND THERE......




GODFATHER

Tie your 'fists to cement', so you can come with some 'hard hit
punches'/
I smell victory cuz the only 'sure'-thing under ya arms is 'crutches'/
(DECENT OPENER...MULTIES AND VOCAB GOOD...FLOW GOOD...7/10)

Makin more blunders than retarded stuntmen, my 'drunken-style' leaves you sober, face down/
cant handle 'daps', arm fall'n off from me giving you this 'pound'/
(WORD PLAY GOOD...FLOW GOOD...PUNCHES GOOD...8/10)

you found the path of death, I shatter text with claws wrapped around this bastard's neck/
U must be a 'square', u and the winners circle are not congruent/
(FIRST LINE WAS RAW AS FUCK...FLOW WAS GOOD, BUT THE SECOND LINE PLAYED IT OUT...IF THAT RHYMED WITH IT HARD IT WOULD HAVE BEEN RAW AS FUCK...8.5/10)

heres my 2 cents, you must be willing to die with your mind cluttered/
Work on text design fucker then develop some rhyme structure/
(DECENT CLOSER I GUESS...FLOW WAS GOOD...WORDPLAY WAS WEAK IN THIS ONE...7/10)

AIGHT...YOUR FLOW WAS GOOD...THE MULTIES AND PUNCHES WERE ALL SET...YOU COULD UP YOUR VOCAB IN SOME AREAS BUT NOTHING TO BIG TO FIX...EXCEPT FOR YOUR STRUCTURE...ITS SLOPPY DOGG...FIX THAT UP AND YOU WILL BE SET...


VOTE...GODFATHER

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