nice man. real nice.

...i think it started a lttle "uh w/e" but as i read it, it was just getting better and better and it ended so damn good. That close:
"So before you try to score that top notch spot on top of it all
Just remember your greed is your seccessor as well as ur downfall"
-Was mad dope man. Keep that up fo sho.

Other lines stood out but none like that.

You kept to topic well, and had a good structure and flow. Also i liked that it really went somewhere.

Good going

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