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Old 03-06-05, 05:49 PM   #15
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Voted For: Young Blaze

uh, heres what i see

illmental.....basically your not getting my vote because of your flow and structure....boy, it was pretty crazy in that verse, stretched lines, forced rhymes, gotta even that out man, it took alot away from your punches that you were throwing.....plus, your wordplay and vocab needs to be upped, if you have good vocab and wordplay, your punches will come across alot nicer/stronger.....

young blaze, not bad you had some structure problems too, i think, just at the start, then you got into a nice rhythm, okay, i think you had the harder punchces/personals, not really anthing that totally jumped out at me....you didnt stretch many of your lines, you stayed consistent with dissin throught out your verse, which is good, overall, thought you took this pretty easy, still need some elevating, but yeah

v/young blaze
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