ight first of ya flow and structre are horrible rhymes were'nt that good either up ur vocab ur lines are way to strecthed make em like
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something like that....read around other peoples open mics and u'll get what im sayin better...do some wordplay ask around for some more advice orya can hit me up in a private messeage and ill help ya out some moreor u cna go to the emergency help center and look aroud there and that'll help u good luck man...return the feedback in one of my open mics in my signutare....peace

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