i kinda liked this..but it wasn't anything great in my oppinion...the whole disease was a metaphor...but you had no metaphors within the piece...and that makes imagery really difficult...and imagery is the most important thing in expressing something...also...too straight forward for me...THERE IS NOTHING WRONG WITH STRAIGHT FORWARD...i just prefer poetry that you really have to pay attention to, challenging poetry that forces me to think about whats being said and why it's being said..but over all..this was good poetry...nice work

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