Voted For: Drama Queen
DQ:
good verse, your imagery was probably your best aspect, but the emotion wasnt far behind that. Decent use of vocabulary. At some points it was inconsistent and no need for a certain word, but in other places like the last two lines of your second part were really good. You stayed pretty consistent on the topic, a couple spots you fell off, but not many ppeople can stay on the topic the whole way through. I like the build up the intense part of your verse also
overall: 8.2/10
Parallel:
Well i felt that you could have done alot better with this piece, Especially compared to other pieces i have seen from you. You came at this topic with more of a simple angle. Not trying to delve too much into vocabulary or imagery. he most outstanding part of your verse would be the emotion. You kept that on a steady pace the whole way through so i appluade you for that much. Could have done better in a couple areas but not too bad of a verse
overall: 6.8/10
Vote: Drama Queen
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