this poem.....hmmmm

look i know the ins n outs of poetry ad this is wack (poet of da month right here lmao)

nah real fbak:
yo a lot of your lines lack form, structure and imagery and emotion....a lot of your drop seems to be imperative statements or jus simple sentences and thus it sounds more like a normal monologue than a deep heartfelt piece of poetry...the repetition of "you" created a cool effect and helped dirve home a lot of ur metaphors etc...I like the content and approach to this poem, it shows a level of higher thinkin which is dope and shows actual talent and intelligence...id say work on emotion, imagery, similies and creativity

Peace

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