Yeah man your structure was off a Lil' and at first I didnt know what I was readin', a poem or a rap, You stayed on topic and the flow was iight. You need a lil more emo in it though.. what beat was you writin' to.. over all it was worth the read and i give it like, 6.9/10 keep this up famm..
late..
Sweft

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