ok i dont like the way this was wrote more in a topical form without the rhyme scheme i personally hate poems like that but i will leave honest feedback.your imagery needs work you need to use more emotional words and bring a better picture accross and that hurt your poem badly here your vocab and everything else is ok as well try to let yourself free flow i see alot of poets are forcing themselves to write dont do that take your time it will come oput much better still it was a decent drop here far from trash just work a little on what i said

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