fuck an intro and outro. it doesnt matter. its not the verse. you should've put your link in the main verse.

It's like we in Em's movie, yah games shorter then sum elf
Jay relates to the topic how he 8 mile....'s behind eryone else
blah this was decent.....7/10
You cant dodge opponents punches, your bars r straight misses
Everyone can place hits on yah cheeks, like 5th grader's kisses
blah, this was alright...koo verse 6/10
In battle's you 'break-fast', so just recognize the stop marks
I could give you 'Kellog's' recipe, you still wouldn't 'pop tarts'
hmm, i thought that line would be played but never heard it before, nice 8/10

you shouldn't of wasted all those lines on the intro and outro. 'cause thats all it is. an intro and outro. its basically a way for extra lines but i aint votin based on that. but anywayz your structure was nice...wordplay was good...some witty punches...i was feelin it...personals....blah...there was some but not in the main verse so. blah

21/30

ur not sicka than me,listen da me homo not a written dis is a key.
dis fag said he's da "truth"..but he's nothin but his name missin da E.*L.I.E*
blah, this wasnt good at all....5/10
old vets dont get respect no more dickhead, where da fukk u been?.
he said had a "mercedes" he lyin like da "rice" datz his "UNCLE BENZ".
....LOL....jea this shit was dope...famz...nice shit 8.5/10
u not gon merk jay now try later,ur a nobody stop sayin guy's hate ya.
admit it I ATE YA,he wack only "BUZZ dis PUSSy" a have is a "vibrator".
this shit was decent...nothing special i give you 7/10

i made it even so no one complains. 6 lines vs 6 lines. cause thats all LI had in his accual verse. but i honestly think they should take those intro, outro shit out. its confusing and its just a way for extra lines. but anywayz. from wat i read your punches are ok. you lack wittyness. but the wordplay is good. your flow was koo...stucture was blah.. overall you got

20.5/10


and also marv you fed off his verse


vote: L.I

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