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So are we doing the intro then a diss to the opponent and an outro or what?..Check by the way.

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Correct. The intro and outro are separate from the actual verse. Changed the outro length by the way.

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okay...check..................

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"Wordz Ahgod has DECLINED this battle on 12-20-06 09:49 PM.

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^^he's scared.lol

Intro
I'm 'pimp' wit it yo, the girls gather to 'suck me off', so stop speakin
Cause shit, I get 'blown' more then bumpin in stock 'speakers'
Marv's game is 'crunchy' he aint got a 'sweet taste' for singers
The way Jay can't 'grasp' talent, he's called 'butterfingers'

Haha!..listen up yo..

It's like we in Em's movie, yah games shorter then sum elf
Jay relates to the topic how he 8 mile....'s behind eryone else
You cant dodge opponents punches, your bars r straight misses
Everyone can place hits on yah cheeks, like 5th grader's kisses
In battle's you 'break-fast', so just recognize the stop marks
I could give you 'Kellog's' recipe, you still wouldn't 'pop tarts'

Outro
Now thats how you diss kid, take notes or whatever please
Marvjay is lact-tose-n-tolerant the way he dont make cheese
Quit bothering admin's, get off this site and go home slut
He yeah you run RV...the way you all over strobe's nuts

Don't feed faggot..

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INTRO-
all da rv mc's & rapper's is sick of u,ima leave dis fagget in critical.
L.I ur a has been 'no 1 see' u' & not cuz u made ya status invisable.
dis lame-2-wild,u hate jay's-new-style,hotest on rv? aint-you-child.
u snitched on SPUL 4 bitin from a joke look ya'll in da same-crew-now.

ur not sicka than me,listen da me homo not a written dis is a key.
dis fag said he's da "truth"..but he's nothin but his name missin da E.*L.I.E*
old vets dont get respect no more dickhead, where da fukk u been?.
he said had a "mercedes" he lyin like da "rice" datz his "UNCLE BENZ".
u not gon merk jay now try later,ur a nobody stop sayin guy's hate ya.
admit it I ATE YA,he wack only "BUZZ dis PUSSy" a have is a "vibrator".
im tired 4real homo stop da hatin,L.I think im off well afta pop his face in.
he think its a "game" on dis rv "board" well dis bitch gon need a "operation".

OUTRO.
hope dis lame is smart,i aint with 'tha game(s)' u'll have a 'change of heart'. u live in a trailor only "mill-house" u'll eva see is da kid dat "hang with bart".
nigga u wont aim n spark,net thug u got aol slugz & dell pistols.
and if u aint on SDIZZLE'S left nut then y ya aim name LTIZZLE.?

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^^he's scared.lol

upping......................

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fuck an intro and outro. it doesnt matter. its not the verse. you should've put your link in the main verse.

It's like we in Em's movie, yah games shorter then sum elf
Jay relates to the topic how he 8 mile....'s behind eryone else
blah this was decent.....7/10
You cant dodge opponents punches, your bars r straight misses
Everyone can place hits on yah cheeks, like 5th grader's kisses
blah, this was alright...koo verse 6/10
In battle's you 'break-fast', so just recognize the stop marks
I could give you 'Kellog's' recipe, you still wouldn't 'pop tarts'
hmm, i thought that line would be played but never heard it before, nice 8/10

you shouldn't of wasted all those lines on the intro and outro. 'cause thats all it is. an intro and outro. its basically a way for extra lines but i aint votin based on that. but anywayz your structure was nice...wordplay was good...some witty punches...i was feelin it...personals....blah...there was some but not in the main verse so. blah

21/30

ur not sicka than me,listen da me homo not a written dis is a key.
dis fag said he's da "truth"..but he's nothin but his name missin da E.*L.I.E*
blah, this wasnt good at all....5/10
old vets dont get respect no more dickhead, where da fukk u been?.
he said had a "mercedes" he lyin like da "rice" datz his "UNCLE BENZ".
....LOL....jea this shit was dope...famz...nice shit 8.5/10
u not gon merk jay now try later,ur a nobody stop sayin guy's hate ya.
admit it I ATE YA,he wack only "BUZZ dis PUSSy" a have is a "vibrator".
this shit was decent...nothing special i give you 7/10

i made it even so no one complains. 6 lines vs 6 lines. cause thats all LI had in his accual verse. but i honestly think they should take those intro, outro shit out. its confusing and its just a way for extra lines. but anywayz. from wat i read your punches are ok. you lack wittyness. but the wordplay is good. your flow was koo...stucture was blah.. overall you got

20.5/10


and also marv you fed off his verse


vote: L.I

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where did i feed off verse at?...aneway 0-1

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^^he's scared.lol

Upping...i say count the intro and outro seeing that it was that type of battle....

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"Wordz Ahgod has DECLINED this battle on 12-20-06 09:49 PM.

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^^he's scared.lol

ok this was an aight battle

but that shit with the intro and outro is pointless really if ya aint gonna count it as part of the verse, just a waste of time puttin in extra lines that mean nothing to the battle.

L.I. - ya had sum nice punches, i think u wasted some shit in ure intro and outro, i mean wit the link....that was stupid cuz the outro dont count. u dropped some personals but u put them outside of the verse ??? i think u had some clever punches, ure structure was on form as always and u had some gud wordplay. but i think that the best part of ure whole verse was the parts that dont count, the intro and outro!!!

MarvJ - again, u did the same, dropped a couple of nice lines in ure intro and outro, but they dont count, especially that closing part of ure outro, shit was funny!!! anyway, i thought u had punches that were slightly better, ure structure was good and the wordplay was tight. i dont know whether it is that L.I. only recently came back and still needs to find his flow but his last few drops have been weak....so i give this to MarvJ for slightly harder punches.

V/ - MarvJay1009

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People..COUNT the intros and outros....we did them for a reason...so dont exclude them.

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old vets dont get respect no more dickhead, where da fukk u been?.
he said had a "mercedes" he lyin like da "rice" datz his "UNCLE BENZ".

who can stop him?