Voted For: Stanza

stanza

Im at the end and yet still I see no signs of victory within
Maybe it is Defeat that is waiting for me At The end
^^IGHT OPENER
This is it I can barely go on like this struggle & gasping for air
I dont see my completion or my place rest...but yet its there
^^NICE LINE
if its not in the past & not in the future how is it present?
These question got me pondering and answers im guessing
^^DECENT
Hold off on the delays I can Finaly See my mark of Prize
My place of strength and my place of rest but yet... Surprise
^^IIGHT
I Open my eyes only to see the harsh and cruel real vision
I was headed in the wrong direction my senses were missin
^^LIKE IT
This was a time of prayer so I feel down on my bending Knee
And I began to Beg the God above for his merciful Peace
^^GOOD LINE
Then The Sky was Broken and I seen My ending Place
My Final run Was over Thanx to God's Wonderful Grace
^^PRETTY GOOD CLOSURE

STANZA- I LIKED MOST OF UR VERSE. THERE WAS ALOT OF TOUGHTFUL VOCAB INVOLVED AND I LIKED THAT. THE STRUCTURE WAS NICE AND EASY TO READ. JUS NEED TA ELEVATE A LIL BIT MO HOMIE N U GON B STR8 8.5/10

NELSON MANDELA

Generations of hurt faces, painfully patient, jus waiting
for eyes of hatred to realize slaves are mistaken
tried escaping, but the death toll remains steadily updatin
^^VERY GOOD OPENER

*This is it our final run, rise with thy heart not thy fist*

one last chance at freedom spoken with words of truthful meaning
our final run even those whose life is yet to begun.soul leakin,still leading
^^O.K
holdin, the torch to light the way for those even blinded by greed
even though working on plants doesnt give us food for the mouths we feed
^^DECENT LINE
last shot to cease the deadly risk we take to survive this state of time
our state of mind is set abroad the faithful shine from eyes
of the honestly forgiving, unsinningly fufilling this final rise
^^NICE LINE REALY LIKIN IT
mistreated,beated abused and left bleedin,die from feeling
souls risin through the ceiling,screamin 4 emotional healing
^^AVERAGE CLOSURE

NELSON MANDELA- I LIKED UR VERSE AS WELL. THIS WUZ A VERY CLOSE BATTLE B/W BOF OF U, I LIKED UR LYRICAL DICTION AND THOUGHTFUL LINES. UR STRUCTURE WUZ NICE AND EASY 2 READ. U R REAL GOOD AT TOPICALS BUT I THINK HE HAD U BEAT
NO HATE AT AL B/C U R REAL GOOD.
8/10
VERY VERY VERY CLOSE BATTLE BUT MY V GOES 2 STANZA
V/STANZA

CUD U PLEASE RTF IN DA BATTLE IN MY SIG W/AN HONEST VOTE
THANX!

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